After Liu Bang attacks the capital Xianyang, he kills emperor Fusu and takes the throne.
Liu Bang’s first plan is to go to Xianyang, the Qin capital and break through the great wall at night when everyone is sleeping.
Liu Bang doesn’t like that the Qin dynasty is known as the most strongest and the most ruling dynasty and Liu Bang who led the Han dynasty wanted to be known as the best dynasty of all time.
Liu Bang is the first emperor of the Han Dynasty. He was born into a peasant family. He is known as an emperor who contributed a large amount of the prosperity of the Han Dynasty.
On the other hand the Qin dynasty who Liu Bang already attacked has a very mean and a harsh dynasty. In 210 BC Qin died and his son took over his empire. Emperor Qin was a harsh emperor because he had harsh laws, also people had to pay taxes because that was his rule. Fusu was Qin’s oldest son and when Fusu’s dad died he kept all the laws as the same as his father did and ruled exactly how he did too.
Liu Bang and his army planned to kill every single one of Fusu’s people and kill Fusu the last one. Before Liu Bang has took over the Qin dynasty he plans on abandoning the harsh Qin laws, reduced taxes, and protected the people. People would probably appreciate how Liu Bang would be taking care of them.
Your changes in organization have made this article much better. You still need to work on verb tense, which I can help you with in class.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I am concerned that your last paragraph is fast-forwarding in time. If he has just taken over, then how would you know, "he has abandoned the harsh Qin laws, reduced taxes, and protected the people. People are appreciating how Liu Bang is taking care of them and how his feeding them..." I think you could change this to say that Liu Bang is planning on doing these things. Finally, remember that hard news should have NO opinion, which you have in your last line, "and this is why Liu Bang is the best emperor of all time." You need to eliminate this.